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by MihaP

for the Novice Round

 
 

Verdict

Tom Fulp

Inspiring message!

Stejk Robot

Really pleasent entry, the concept was original and the character design solid. Everything leading up to the paintings moving really had me, but the painting scene could have been so much more! It was a perfect opotunity to show the feelings of the boy, the inner struggles he's faceing when in the room. It didnt feel like he was expressing himself, it was more a mean of passing time.

Rice Pirate

Shorts with a very intentional moral lesson often suffer from "hitting you over the head", this did not, til the end. If there's a way to let your story do that for you, it leaves much to the viewer and often give them a greater appreciation for coming to that discovery themselves. A simple dialogue like, "what happened to the other guy? how'd you manage to survive?" then he just holds the crayons or we see the book, is a little less heavy handed. I'm not saying that's "better", but it allows the story and audience to the work, rather than just hand it to us at the end.

Mind Chamber

dug the robot designs, and it was a decent PSA.. The crayon sequence was great though nice job

Total
62 / 80
Artwork
10 / 16
Animation
14 / 16
Originality
14.5 / 16
Story
12.5 / 16
Entertainment
11 / 16

Score Breakdown

  •  
  • Artwork
  • Animation
  • Originality
  • Story
  • Entertainment
  • Total
  • Average
  • TomFulp
  • 3
  • 3
  • 3.5
  • 3.5
  • 3
  • 16
  • 3.2
  • StejkRobot
  • 3
  • 3
  • 4
  • 2
  • 2
  • 14
  • 2.8
  • RicePirate
  • 2
  • 4
  • 4
  • 3
  • 3
  • 16
  • 3.2
  • MindChamber
  • 2
  • 4
  • 3
  • 4
  • 3
  • 16
  • 3.2
  • Totals
  • 10
  • 14
  • 14.5
  • 12.5
  • 11
  • 62
  • 12.4